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Shade
Nov 22, 2015 2:20:15 GMT -5
Post by Shade on Nov 22, 2015 2:20:15 GMT -5
Name: Ryu"Shade" Starwind
Alias: Star, and Shade
Age: 15
Grade: Sophomore
Height: 5'7
Weight: 127
Eye Color: Blue
Hair Color: Black
Appearance: Dark
Personality: Dark, Smart, and Shy
Fighting Style: Jujitsu
Strengths: Smart, Speed, and fighting in dark areas.
Weaknesses:Swimming, Strength, and Being out in largecrowds.
History: I only remember what was told to me from my doctor. He had informedme that I had some damage taken to the head and got amnesia. Apparently my dad told the police before he bled out in the ambulance that we were attacked by a gang. Our family had a dark energy lying within us that unleashed under certain conditions. They had found out from somewhere and decided thatwe would be powerful soldiers in the fightfor a school called PHS#552. My family ranaway to seek asylum. They caught up with us and killed everyone except me and my father, although he still died. Now I go to this school.
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Shade
Nov 22, 2015 12:20:36 GMT -5
Post by Amazing Dapper Fish on Nov 22, 2015 12:20:36 GMT -5
Hello! Welcome to the site! This is a very nice profile, but I'm going to have to ask you to spruce up a few things!
-Could you use actual sentences in his personality? Give us more detail! What does he like? What does he dislike? Why is he dark? How is he dark? When is he shy? -Fighting Style needs to be in sentences as well. How well learned is he in jujitsu? If he's lost his memory, how would he even know he knows it? Is he patient in combat or does he just go all out? -Why is he good at fighting in dark areas? -What happens when he's in a large crowd?
-As for the history, most people on the site use third person. However, that's negligible. Any who, what do you mean by "dark energy"? Please remember that the main story of the site is that the world has been relatively normal up until recently and the events around 552 at the catalyst for the powers and bizarre abilities end events that are erupting all over the city.
-Uh students can't be "kidnapped" into 552. 552 is a public school for children with dangerous criminal records. So, please specify how the gang got him into the school.
-Please respond to this thread with the appropriate second post. It's in the application.
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